

[Report This]Date: 05/06/2008 07:40 am Title: Into The Mirror Darkly
The story has very interesting plot twists. However, it is a bit much to take in all the names that are listed. I need a chart to keep track of who is who and what they do to try to keep things straight in my head. It might not be so bad perhaps if the paragraghs weren't so long. It might help if you were to split the paragraphs into smaller chunks for easier comprehension.
Take it easy, and don't give up. ;~)




[Report This]Date: 04/04/2008 05:27 pm Title: The Alliance of the Lynx
I'm not surprised that she had fainted. After all there were many of those she knew dead, now walking around.
Good job, and a great imagination to have come up with this story!
Author's Response: I am glad you are enjoying it




[Report This]Date: 04/04/2008 04:32 pm Title: The final wand wave
Very cool story concept lady! Keep up the good work. ;-D