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Reviewer: RedsAttic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/17/2009 11:59 am Title: Wait

EXCELLENT!!!!

I look forward to reading more in the future---

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 09:08 pm Title: Wait

*::cackling and chuckling::*
Oh my, so the romantic weekend trip that Hermione and Severus will be taking together will be when she becomes pregnant with Jamie Scott Snape, hey?
;~D
I can't wait to read all about it!

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I love this story, it is very well thought out plot wise and character development wise too!

I'm looking forward to additional chapters.

Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. 'Everyone thought they both were strict, but Hermione [There ought to be a comma (,) inserted here.] or professor Kitching ["professor Kitching" should be "Professor Kitching"] as we might call her [There ought to be a comma (,) inserted here.] was a little more helping and understanding.'
  2. 'They made sure with Dumbledore that it was OK for ["for" should be "with"] him that both of them left the caste for the weekend.'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 08:46 pm Title: Wait

*SQUEE*
OMG--lucky girl, to be invited to his office only to be immediately pinned to the wall have the living daylights snogged out of her!
;~D

Interesting bit of info there that girls are not able to get pregnant within the walls of the castle.  I love how upon discussing that bit of trivia they then proceeded to have sex--very lucky girl indeed!
;~D

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. 'It was far beyond lovely, Hermione felt she could stand there forever, and be happy with it, all though ["all though" should be "although"] she really wanted more.'
  2. 'His red hair just as easy to spot as his little brother’s had been at the express ["express" should be "Express"] in her first year of studying.'
  3. 'Was she the first defence against the dark arts ["defence against the dark arts" should be "Defence Against the Dark Arts"] teacher she had heard him talking about sometimes at the Burrow?'
  4. '“... Professor Jean Bondo Kitching will be taking on the post of Defence against the dark arts ["Defence against the dark arts" should be "Defence Against the Dark Arts"] teacher this year.'
  5. 'He stood up and clapped, and most of the students and teachers joined in, weather ["weather" should be "whether"] wholeheartedly or not it wasn’t good to say.'
  6. '... she could feel that he was getting exited ["exited" should be "excited"], due to the closeness in which they were standing.'
  7. 'She was getting exited ["exited" should be "excited"] to ["to" should be "too"], but all though ["all though" should be "although"] she did not tell him, ...'
  8. '“It’s me, professor MgGonagall ["professor MgGonagall" should be "Professor McGonagall"].”'
  9. '“... and I just wanted you to know that I’m here if you need some advise ["advise" should be "advice"] and company.”'
  10. '“Nonsense. Professor Flitwick is right up your allay ["allay" should be "alley"]!”

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 07:56 pm Title: Wait

*SQUEE* 
OMG--I absolutely love how Hermione feels that Severus is an expert when comes to his knowledge of the application of lips upon another, and tongue wrestling too.  I was further amused and happy as all hell that she got turned on by the idea of having an affair with the good professor during her seventh year at Hogwarts and also his commanding tone of voice--VERY SEXY INDEED!
;~D

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. '“... Hihi [If this is suppose to be laughing, then I believe "Hihi" ought to be "HeeHee" ]!”
  2. 'He, as well as Hermione [There ought to be a comma (,) inserted here.] were getting red in the face and started to walk to Hogmead.
  3. 'The incounter ["incounter" should be "encounter"] with Peeves made them less talkative ...'
  4. 'Snape [There ought to be a comma (,) inserted here.] she saw, only joined them rather reluctantly, and Hermione remembered how the mauraders/snape ["mauraders/snape" should be "Mauraders/Snape"] relationship had been.'
  5. 'Snape [There ought to be a comma (,) inserted here.] on the other hand, was mentally hitting himself for not having asked Jean who she was going to meet.'
  6. '... Lupin had been his favourite amongst the mauraders ["mauraders" should be "Mauraders"], ...'
  7. '“... He’s not the kind of person who invites to [The word "to" is not necessary.] intimacy, especially not with people he has disliked.”
  8. '“... I can’t help it if you hated the mauraders ["mauraders" should be "Mauraders"], can I?”'
  9. 'He said finally, and all tough ["all tough" should be "although"] he still sounded angry, it was much more in a puzzled way.'
  10. 'He grabbed her tightly around her waist and they stood like that for some time, only kissing in the late august ["august" should be "August"] night.'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 03:03 pm Title: Wait

Excellent!  Everything is coming together in that she is making friends both with Professor Snape and others outside of the school (Lupin and such).

I REALLY like how Hermione and Severus are becoming closer to each other and that the other staff members can see it and are giving them sly looks because of it--very cute.

Damn Dumbledore for interrupting what could have been a yummy snog session.  ARGH! 

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. 'But it was rather trilling ["trilling" should be "thrilling"] for both of them to have a title so on some occasions they used them simply for the fun of it.'
  2. 'His shirt was slightly see-trough and reviled ["reviled" should be "revealed"] a body that suggested he was more that capable of sweeping her of her feet and carry her wherever she wanted him to.'
  3. '“I was just wondering, if you might, er, go with me to the Hogs head ["Hogs head" should be "Hog's Head"] tomorrow evening. ...”'
  4. '“I mean. Where ["Where" should be "Were"] they both magical or what?”'
  5. 'She decided that it would probably be best to be a pureblood for some reasons but a ["a" should be "as"] she was a muggleborn she decided to split the difference.'
  6. '“... I miss my parents ofcourse ["ofcourse" should be "ofcourse"], ... And films. I’ve always loved filmes ["filmes" should be "films"], ...”'
  7. 'Snape could not quite pull of ["of" should be "off"] the politeness in the sentence.'
  8. '“... But if you deliberately try to change time, it will perhaps have disasters ["disasters" should be "disastrous"] consequences.”'
  9. '“And sleeping with professor Snape ["professor Snape" should be "Professor Snape"] will not?”'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 02:18 pm Title: Wait

Oh my, Hermione is quite the wicked girl to have handed Severus her baggy of naught unmentionables just to see his reaction--too funny.
;~D

Great story!

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. '“Yes, perhaps. I think I might sort my muggle affairs first thought ["thought" should be "though"].”'
  2. 'They must have been thinking of different locations in London though, because Snape could not she ["she" should be "see"] her anywhere as he appeared in the street.'
  3. ' As the meals on their plates grew smaller and smaller, her awkwardness on simply sitteng ["sitteng" should be "sitting"] down and talking to him, almost dissapeard ["dissapeard" should be "disappeared"].'
  4. '... Hermione thought she saw a small redheaded boy with two adults going in to “madam malkins” ["madam malkins" should be "Madam Malkins"], but thought no [You ought to insert the word "more".] of it.'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 01:40 pm Title: Wait

Ya-hoo!  I'm so stoked because I'm more than certain now that Dumbledore is hinting that she should let nature take its course... fall in love, have babies, etc.

BRILLIANT!

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. '“... But one must not get once ["once" should be "one's"] hope ["hope" should be "hopes"] up that it will be this easy to find more info. ...”'
  2. '“... Then I shall proseed ["proseed" should be "proceed"] with the research with the thought in mind that you know and accept it if I do not find anything. ...”'
  3. '“... if you are here now, is ["is" should be "it"] means that you were here now in the history of time. ...”'
  4. '“... as an advance on you ["you" should be "your"] salary of course. ...”'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 01:49 am Title: Wait

He (Snape) like her--COOL!

I love how they are kind-of-sort-of flirting with each other--brilliant!

Oopsie, she forgot about not having ANY possessions in which to put into her rooms. 

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. 'At this rate, he would not be surprised if some of the head ["head" should be "heads"] of house suddenly said they would retire as Slughorn had, and give here ["here" should be "her"] that position too.'
  2. 'Truth be told, he was not entirely certain that he ["that he" is not necessary here.] if he felt angry or pleased.'
  3. 'He didn’t seem to think it was stupied ["stupied" should be "stupid"] however, ...'
  4. 'Shit, she had totally forgotten to ask Dumbledore about what she would to ["to" should be "do"] for cloths and stuff.'
  5. '... so it would just be silly to do it to ["to" should be "too"] many times.'
  6. '... she could set them up so that they excepted ["excepted" should be "accepted"] some people like herself, but hold of ["of" should be "off"] other people like the students.'
  7. ' ... as this was so ridicules ["ridicules" should be "ridiculous"] she would not forget it, ...'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 01:21 am Title: Wait

' “Oh, and Miss Granger. It is not in your power to try and alter time, but if something should happen, that just falls into place itself, would you just be as kind as to, let it? There might be a reason for you coming back here, and I think it is very wise for us to take that into account should anything here, let’s say, develop…”'

*::cheering excitedly::*
Sure sounds like foreshadowing to me of impending developing conditions--too cool!  I'm off to read chapter four now.

Ta!

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--error found needing correction:

'“... And I think it might have been a potion in Professor Snapes ["Snapes" should be "Snape's"] office that sent me here. ...”'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 01:07 am Title: Wait

Hmm, I'm wondering if Hermione and Severus are the parents of one Jeremy Scott Snape.  If so, then she must stay for a few years at the very least to be able to give birth to the boy.

I love this story's concept and potential plot-wise and character interaction so far.

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. 'There had been several teacher ["teacher" should be "teachers"] in her years that had given more than a few undeserved points to students in the house they had been in.'
  2. '... and Harry and Dumbledore was ["was" should be "were"] now almost confident that the only part left of Voldemorts ["Voldemorts" should be "Voldemort's"] soul was the one actually inside of him.'
  3. 'Ofcourse ["Ofcourse" should be "Of course"], ...'
  4. '“I don’t recall giving you my permission to search my potion cabinat ["cabinat" should be "cabinet"], miss ["miss" should be "Miss"] Granger.”
  5. 'With a pang she remembered that it might be due to her braking ["braking" should be "breaking"] the only rule he had laid out for her when he had gone to see Dumbledore, ...'
  6. '“... Not that I don’t apriciate ["apriciate" should be "appreciate"] female companionship, ...”'
  7. 'But it sent chills down Hermiones ["Hermiones" should be "Hermione's"] back in a good way, ...'
  8. '... and the only official meeting she had with Dumbledore had been in Hogsmeed ["" should be "Hogsmeade"], ...'
  9. 'She was still shocked by the situation, and didn’t really want to spear ["spear" should be "spare"] any energy on conversation.'
  10. '... judging by the fact that it was Snapes ["Snape's" should be "Snape's"] first year here.'

Reviewer: Wistful_Stargazer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/16/2009 12:16 am Title: Wait

Hmm, most interesting.  From the following quote I take it that Hermione must have gone back to a time when Snape was either a student or during his early teaching career, and taught under the name of JEAN Granger.

'“Ah, Miss Hermione JEAN Granger, the headmaster said I should expect a visit from you. Isn’t this a surprising pleasure?”'

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Well done--keep up the good work!
:D

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

  1. 'Then there had been Umbrigde ["Umbrigde" I believe ought to be "Umbridge"].'
  2. 'When the door was fully open and reviled ["reviled" should be "revealled"] the man’s visitor, he showed no sign of surprise.'
  3. '“Surely, miss ["miss" should be "Miss"] Granger, you know what I coved in my year as Defence-teacher. ...”
  4. '“... If miss ["miss" should be "Miss"] Granger is there, I apologise, and ask her to wait in your office until you return. ...”'
  5. 'Snape rose. How ["How" should be "He"] started to follow the patronus that has already walked out of sight, as he turned to her with a last scrutinising look.'

Reviewer: hedwig88 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/11/2009 01:03 am Title: Wait

you should write more for this story, i want to know what happens next lol.

Reviewer: annmarie Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/01/2009 11:22 am Title: Wait

I love it  and hope to read more when you finish writing   thanks

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