Date: 01/25/2010 08:36 pm Title: Chapter 5 - Among the Mundi Roses
Mme Strange,
As much as I enjoy the story, I must say that I find your constant need to justify your story with author's notes that are easily longer than the chapters themselves rather needless. Your story should (and does) stand by itself, without the need for your never-ending backstories and citations. In reading, it seems to present two options; the first, that you are that insecure in your writing and, therefore, feel obliged to support your every word, and the second that you are merely that conceited and that you feel the need to display the wealth and breadth of your knowledge with every chapter. Neither reasons lends much to your story.
Although I find that author notes are often necessary, particularly when making references to history or other works of literature, there is a limit to this need. In this way, I find your defining the meanings of the flowers fitting, as would your clarification of some of the terms. However, your repeated paragraphs on "why wolfsbane represents 'misanthropy'" and the long descriptions of things such as the origins of the name Hiero are much too long, wordy, and irrelevant. And so, despite my finding what I have read of your story delightful and well-written, I'd suggest some serious editing of your author's notes.
Sincerely,
AnnaTheCat
Date: 05/11/2009 11:28 am Title: Chapter 10 - A Sprig of Lavender
Is the dig about severous being a nobleman taken in part from'Devils Cub' by Georgetter Heyer where mary Challoner (not sure about spelling) says a similar thing to the marquis of Vidal??
[Report This]Date: 03/02/2007 05:47 pm Title: Chapter 15 - Wild Tansy in the Wind
Very, VERY Georgette Heyer, wouldn't you say?